Obscure Lucidity.

Hey everyone,

Today I thought I would share a quirky poem that I have recently written for one my creative literature assignments.  It took me SO long to choose a topic for this poem, but in the end I decide to go with 'lucid dreaming' and I'm so glad that I did because I found this subject really easy to write about.  I posted this first draft on my class page a little over a week ago and so far I have only received feedback from the course examiner.  She was really lovely though and couldn't really offer me any constructive criticism, so I figured I would post this poem on my blog in hopes that one of my awesome readers might have some constructive feedback for me. ;)

For this assignment we're supposed to present a first draft and a good copy, so even though I'm entirely happy with my poem as it is, unfortunately I have to alter it somehow in order to meet the assignment criteria.  So please, if you have a spare five minutes, I would love loveee LOVE to hear what you have to say!

Obscure Lucidity

Violently vivid, not unrealistic
The dreams which in I scream.
A ghost inside a world upturned; 
Silent tears a heavy stream.

Paralysed, from the inside out
Trying hard not to engage,
For each light switch that I turn on
Traps me in another cage.

Walls turned floors, dimensions change
I fight the urge to climb;
Of no avail, defences cave
To experiences so sublime.

And as I wake, exhaling fear
Beneath the bed I sweep,
No truths untold, nor lies unsung
Just secrets that I keep.

An original poem written by Felicity (21/04/2013).

I also have to write a short story aimed at an adult audience which I intend to start and hopefully finish by this evening.  I've decided that I'm going to write about the recent near death of my Nana, so depending on how I feel about it I might even share that short story on here as well. :)

Thank you so much for reading and supporting me!

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